Today we practiced re crafting a piece of writing.The first paragraph belongs to Aldora and the second is mine.
“Oh my god” I said, I never knew cross country was going to be so hard and long. When I got half way I started to sprint so I could catch up to some girls but sadly I didn’t. I was getting closer to the finish line and I was so proud of myself.
Re crafting:
Have you ever ran through a muddy cross-country before?
Running along,I never Imagined the cross - country would be so challenging.It felt like it would take the rest of my life to get to the finish line.Powerfully,I tried to catch up to the other girls,but was so exhausted that I could`nt.
Re crafting:
Have you ever ran through a muddy cross-country before?
Running along,I never Imagined the cross - country would be so challenging.It felt like it would take the rest of my life to get to the finish line.Powerfully,I tried to catch up to the other girls,but was so exhausted that I could`nt.
1 comment:
Kia Ora Nikita ,
I really like what you tried to do with your writing. Now I know how it feels when kids your age think of cross country . :)
keep up your good work.
Lesley. :)
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