50 Word Story

Celebrating a fantastic,incredible finish, Richard Whitehead is disabled but he won the 100m sprint race at the Paralympics. Jumping in the air being proud of himself, the crowd goes wild. Great Britain has achieved once and for all, with their amputee champion.I believe that athletes can try hard.

Re Crafting

Today we practiced re crafting a piece of writing.The first paragraph belongs to Aldora and the second is mine.  

Aldora`s Paragraph

“Oh my god” I said, I never knew cross country was going to be so hard and long. When I got half way I started to sprint so I could catch up to some girls but sadly I didn’t. I was getting closer to the finish line and I was so proud of myself.

Re crafting:
Have you ever ran  through a muddy cross-country before?
Running along,I never Imagined the cross - country would  be so challenging.It felt like it would take the rest of my life to get to the finish line.Powerfully,I tried to catch up to the other girls,but was so exhausted that I could`nt.